kool
welll for your first attemp, it wasnt so bad, what i advice you is that the song is very repetitive, the same tones and sounds all the song, that way youre boring the people because they know thats the whole song, try to use more effects, and change sounds, i make my songs this way: part one, part 2, and barely part 3, i mean that you make some different mixes in the song, i hope this was useful to you.